Management - You Have Some Assessment Answer

You have some relevant information in your introduction but I recommend getting advice from an academic skills advisor on your writing style. General commonly known information doesn’t need a citation, if you are asserting something more than this (eg that poor hand eye coordination leads to learning disorders) then you need a peer reviewed reference, a website is not suitable in this context. I’m not sure what gaze compensation is or how it is relevant to this task. The methods needs to be written with an academic voice, and needs to clearly articulate how the experiment and intervention were carried out (ie explain what gaze compensation is and how this was implemented). The task only required descriptive summary statistics and these should have been presented in a table in the results. Line graph is not appropriate, I can’t tell if the paired t-test is appropriate without knowing more about how the experiment was designed (but a test was not required in any case). The sentences in the discussion belong in the results; you have no discussion on the strengths and limitations, or relating your experiment back to the literature references in the introduction. I strongly recommend you work with an academic skills adviser to build general academic skills in understanding and demonstrably meeting task requirements, and academic writing.